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Gothic Miss X - Kiriban

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Yayy my first kiriban request! It is :iconshnoogums5060:'s Miss X. I am soo happy!

I really liked the idea, it is really unique! So I played with the style.

By the way, I tried out a new lineart style... I like it though it is time consuming.

Please donate :points:!

If you have PM please critique! It is a fantastic option!



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:star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Vision
:star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

Alright, so here's the long awaited critique.

I would like to first make it clear that while I do enjoy certain anime and manga and have attempted the style on my own before, I am not what you would call a "big fan" of it. It's not to say I like it, but it's certainly not to say I'm its biggest advocate.

That being said, I'll review the piece.

Vision: While this is a kiriban reward, there does seem to be a lack of theme throughout the piece. It is hard to explain what I mean by this, but the biggest example I can give you is the clothing. While there is nothing specifically wrong with the clothes, there is nothing specifically right about them either. What I mean by this is that, for one, "Miss X" appears to be more drawn into the clothes rather than the clothes being placed on her. The skirt specifically would be more on her abdomen than covering her hips, which seem to start after the short blue slip. The skirt also lacks volume and what I mean by that is that while it is common to see anime skirts with this ruffle pattern, it only works when the skirt itself can be seen as a three dimensional object rather than a 2D figure. I'll explain better how to portray that in the Technique section. Another issue I have with it is that, no matter how much you take a straight iron to it, skirts are still fabric and, especially in free-flowing fabric like skirts and dresses, will have wrinkles and some sort of dimension outside of the fact that they are round. This would also aid in ideas for shading but, again, I'll get more to that in technique. The "ruffles" are also distracting because they are not uniform. What I mean by that is that things, especially designer clothing, have patterns and look consistent. Humans are pattern-oriented animals and when things don't add up it seems unappealing to us. This goes ten fold in clothing and because of that a designer would go the extra mile to make sure that the ruffles and folds in a skirt are the same size. As artists, we should do the same thing. These same issues can be found in the corsets. Corsets are stiffer and could be more apt to shaping the body around them than a skirt, however, they too are fabric and have patterns, specifically the tie string. I would suggest, in both clothing cases, googling some references. There are plenty and it will help you with making them more realistic, which is very important in all styles, even anime and manga. The head is also shaped strangely for me, a little too round and lacking the dynamic facial structures that could individualize your style from all the different anime artists out there. I'll, once again, explain that much more in the following sections.

Originality: This is a very common pose in art( [link] ), which is fine. Some of the most famous comic covers and scenes are replications of famous artwork ( [link] ). However, this does mean that you will have to have something very striking and noticeable catch the eyes of casual viewers. I think what you were trying to do this with the "Anonymous" sign, however, it is not prominent enough in the picture to get across and, along with that, is shaded to the point that it gets glanced over in favor for your "glittered" areas. The clothes again block the originality of the picture because other than being a mini skirt and a corset that are black and red, there's nothing particularly noticeable about them. I would correct this by having some designs and general fun with them ( [link] ). You can have them seem ordinary and in the background, too, but there still should be something memorable about them.

Technique: While this is a good picture, it has a few faults which prevent it from being a really good picture, and this is mostly due to the technique. I would like to start by stating that there is nothing wrong with your technique, but there is not special about it either. This is a combination of style and approach. There are a million anime styles out there and this is a problem I have with the industry, it's hard to make an original anime style because there are simply too many Otaku out there that have dumbed down anime to anything with big eyes and sweat bubbles, which is not what real anime is about. It's an understanding of anatomy that is then stylize. From this picture I would say it would really help if you sat down with some pose stock photos of human faces and poses and maybe even invest in some skeletal poses. If you understand the human anatomy anime does not become a default for your art but a style instead. Heads, even in anime, should not be circles. You can use circular patterns as a part of your style, but using a circle alone is a no-no. Even (good) chibi art doesn't have simple circles as an element. This also greatly contrasts with the ultra-skinny arms and legs (and waist) that your style is portraying. These contrasts are very distracting and unrealistic to viewers. The largest issue I take with this picture, however, is the coloring and shading. Even with the "glitter" you have in the picture, it just feels very dull and dark, and not in the thematic sense. The problem is that there is no real color investment in the picture and also no clear light source. You need to decide on a light source which, judging by the shadow you inserted, is coming from the top right of the character. The shadows do not follow this pattern as they mostly seem to be formed by a light source directly in front and eye level with the character. In either case, the glitter effects do not flow with these patterns. The glitter should come in areas of extreme light and vary in color themselves. But the colors don't flow, even in the way that they are. The blue additions to the picture are just jarring and distracting and do not seem to serve much purpose. My suggestion would be to read an excellent coloring tutorial from =purplekecleon ( [link] ).

Impact: The bottom line is that while this is a kiriban reward, I cannot help but feel you are also attempting to portray a purpose with it as well, and in its current state, the picture does not really properly convey anything. I credit this to the fact that there's no one thing that is really something for a viewer to latch onto. This is also why I am not usually a fan of three-fourth (knee up) pictures. There is a lot to take in, but not the feeling of completion that comes from a full body shot. If you were attempting to portray a theme coming from the finger on closed lips (silence and blindness, restraint, seduction, etc) then it would have been better to leave this as either a head-shot or a bust shot. If your emphasis was on the "Anonymous" sign then it would have been better to hold the sign more prominently or in a different pose in general. It is important for an artist to put these things into consideration when they make their art. I would suggest looking through other artists' galleries to get an understanding of emphasis, a favorite example of mine is ~tabbykat.

Hope that helps!